緊急求助啊!!雅思作文批改,給個分,說壹有沒有重大語法錯誤或者偏題就好啊.
“Whether should encourage students to join in sports at school is an issue that arouses controversy.” 語法不規範，請確認
“Some people think sports is full of competition, while others against that sports can cultivate students' co-operation.”此句型用的太過頻繁，建議改為sb. suppose +從句或sb. claim +從句或sb. agree +從句或第壹人稱時替換為As far as I am concerned.
“Therefore, some of parents don not encourage their children to pay a attention to sports and even restrict their ambitiousness of sports.”把 some of parents 改成 some of the parents
“To summary, I suggest that parents and teachers should encourage students involve in different sports with their classmates.” 語法不規範
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